Awww no, just remembered about my second interim show. Due to the dissertation, busy time through Christmas break and Amsterdam visit, I forgot to post my feedback. I have received great feedback from my tutor, as well as from students. Let’s see if you agree.
Feedback from students: documentary series, story, emotional, foreign people in England. Statement reads well, tells the intention of the work. Portrait could be bigger and without the chair. More prints next time. Portrait for the final show and photo-book. Good choice of paper type. Think about a new title as it’s a bit funny for such a serious project. Cut out the borders of the portraiture.
Feedback form tutor, Richard Mulhearn: Its visible that you really care about this project. It brings different aspects and uncertainty to each picture. Think about who you photograph, when and where. Really good sense of the absence in relation to person. Really good project, benefiting from your knowledge and experience. I don’t have to talk to you about technical effort and ability as you are doing this well. You need to think about creativity and critical analysis. You gained a confidence and you are moving towards different territory, it become more ambiguous. The idea of foreigners potentially of not knowing how they feel when labelled and constantly defined by people who don’t understand. The project became personal, feels as there is something missing. The person looks as she doesn’t belong in here or is missing something. Become more about somewhere that feels different. Positively confused about whether they want to be here or not. Very well-made picture. Great face and pose. Statement reads well towards the attention of work and what it is about. You need to change the title as it sounds as you don’t care, the irony doesn’t come across. The way she is looking shows this absence, this potential of missing something, being disconnected which is new to your work, as it used to be straight towards the viewer with deadpan face expression.
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Any additional comments?
What should I improve?